TOPIC: TECHNOLOGY HAS CHANGED THE WAY PEOPLE LIVED. WHAT ARE THE BENEFITS OF TECHNOLOGY TO HUMANITY? COMPARE AND CONTRAST TECHNOLOGY NOW AND BEFORE.
In this modern world, it is hard to imagine living without the aid of technology. Some people say that technology has changed the world by making ones life easier and fun. From time to time, there are new technologies invented that helps in making life easier for most people, from communication, transportation, and even to entertainment.
E-mails, cellphones, and internet are only few examples of technological improvements in communication. Back then, people were only able to send letters through mails, which we now call "snail mails", in order for them to send messages to their loved ones far away from home. In this modern era, we can now connect easily with our families and friends using cellphones and internet services by sending them messages through e-mail or SMS, which they are able to read and reply right away using these new inventions.
In addition, cars, light-railway-trains, and airplanes are some of the innovations in transportation made by technology. These modern transports allow us to travel comfortably and quickly to our destinations all over the world. In the old age, transportation were only limited to horses and ships that took them days before they arrive in their respective destinations. With these innovations on transportation, people are now able to visit different places throughout the world.
Moreover, the source of entertainment were limited to radios and poor quality movie played on theaters. Nowadays, people are able to listen to their favorite songs over and over again through their handy ipods and cellphones. Movies can now be viewed not only on theaters but also to our homes with high quality definitions, which make the scenes more real and entertaining.
To sum up, there are numerous benefits brought by technology in humanity. The incessant innovations made in technology seem to improve the lives of people in many different ways.
easier and fun: I think that instead of fun you should put an other word, such as more comfortable.
Instead of writing : From time to time, there are new technologies invented that helps in making life easier for most people, from communication, transportation, and even to entertainment. I think you should write : With the passing of the years technology becomes better and better ( and then you can write an example. For example you can compare one item that has become better in the passing of the years, such as a phone, a TV etc.)
E-mails, cellphones, and internet are only a few examples of technological improvements in communication.
Back then, people... : You should write Then,people...
Really good job... I really like your statement at the second paragraph. ;)
In the old age, transportation was*(was and not were) only limited to horses and ships that took them days before they arrive in their respective destinations. With these innovations on transportation, people are now able to visit different places throughout the world.
favorite -- favourite * the both are correct.
which make the scenes more real : here its better to use the word more realistic.
I really like your conclusion. :)
Finally, I can say that you have done a really nice work and your mistakes are really small.
Walk on like this..
Thank u so much foteini! I was really hoping somebody would write an input and help me improve my writing. You made my day. 😊Thanks again!
there are new technologies invented that helps
-> that help (plural form because of 'there are')
-> the Internet
I think 'beloved individuals' is more reasonable
we can now connect easily with our families and friends using cellphones and internet services
I am a little bit confused at this reduced relative clauses, and I think you should insert 'who' to make your sentence clear.
These modern transports
modern sorts of transport
but also to our homes
at our places
These are my ideas of correction. I hope they can help to improve your essay.
Thank you for your time Anh Nguyen! I'll keep that in mind.
In this modern world, it is hard to imagine living without the help of technology. Some people say that technology has changed the world by making one's life easier and comfortable. From time to time, there are new technologies invented that would help make life easier for most peoplein communication, transportation, and even to entertainment.
When we think of social media we all assume and picture the newest platforms out there such as Snapchat, Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, and etc. What we have to realize is that social media is not a new trend; it has been an ongoing trend that has evolved into the various platforms we now know. Back in the days it was known as communication.
In the past, people used to communicate via hand written letters. These letters would travel far and near to arrive to their final destination. Little by little this form of communication began to spread. As a result, a new form of communication arose, the telegraph, in 1792. For those that don’t know what this is, it is a system for transmitting messages from a distance along a wire, usually creating signals by marking and breaking an electrical connection. This form of communication gave people an alternative way to communicate, than hand written letter delivered by horse (especially when it was long distance). Then in the 1800s major changes came our way. The telephone and radio were invented. With these new devices people were able to communicate much faster (almost instantaneous if available on the other end). Messages, news, and advertisement ran through the radio and was a much faster way to reach more people at one time. To the people living in that day and age it could be said that radio, telephone, letters and telegraphs were their social media platforms. It was the way they were able to communicate with their public.
With the invention of the computer, it allowed for exploration on ways to communicate using this devise. When the first computers came out, they were not as domesticated as they are now. People needed to learn how to code in order to use them. Their codes were punched into cards, and then they would be taken to a machine to be read in order for the message or program to appear on the screen. At the time, this form of communication seemed more time consuming (and expensive) than picking up a phone and dialing. As the creation of new technology evolved, the Internet became more domesticated and easier to use for nonprogrammers. As a result, people were able to use email and chatrooms for faster communication. As more people began the exploration of the Internet new platforms made their way to mainstream America and have been very successful such as Facebook, Twitter, and twitter. These platforms have created a new way of how we communicate with the world.